Post September 13, 2018, 04:40:25 AM

First There was Darkness by Susan Anwin

First off, overall I absolutely loved the story and the way you channeled Lovecraft. Great piece.

The opening line, [Then there was darkness some more,] made me stumble a few times, then I just pressed on with reading the rest of the piece. The "some more" just kept throwing me. It seemed out of place, odd, like a 2 cent melted candy in a bowl of mixed nuts.
Bad luck is better than no luck at all.