Ghost Box, by Charlie Williams


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Post August 08, 2018, 03:22:26 PM

Ghost Box, by Charlie Williams

I enjoyed this story.

Probably should just cut the first four paragraphs, however. A much shorter on ramp will do. All we need to know is: priest, driving, cellphone rings. The story starts there.
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Post August 08, 2018, 07:08:38 PM

Re: Ghost Box, by Charlie Williams

I appreciate your feedback, Cary. I can see how some of the background in the first four paragraphs could be worked into the story as the action unfolds. The call from Father O'Hare would have been a good hook to begin the story. Thanks for the advice, and I'm glad you enjoyed "The Ghost Box"!

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