First There was Darkness by Susan Anwin


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Post August 08, 2018, 02:08:05 PM

First There was Darkness by Susan Anwin

Wow, lots of fun! Sort of an afterlife kind of thing. I especially like how the first line followed the title. Great piece of flash writing. Thanks!
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Post August 12, 2018, 10:46:09 AM

Re: First There was Darkness by Susan Anwin

I agree! Great first line and a nice succinct twist. Nice philosophical food for thought as well.
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Post August 28, 2018, 11:31:48 AM

Re: First There was Darkness by Susan Anwin

I stumbled all over the (some more) part of the first line. It just read choppy to me. The rest of the opening paragraph was a nice creepy WTF just happened kinda feel.

Was the sing song in this section intentional? (my first instinct was to flee, lest I draw the attention of those cyclopean creatures to me and be squashed like a flea)
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