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Lester Curtis wrote:I think you've done a fair job with the scientific end of the subject matter, and octopodes are fascinating critters, certainly. However, the overall tone of it seemed rather distant, perhaps clinical, for the most part; I wasn't too moved by it. Maybe the length is too much, and/or the pacing too slow and even.
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storyguy wrote:And as to Nate's thoughtful comment on Mollie touching Russ' cheek, I tried to convey the idea of Mollie's loneliness and her need to connect with another living being. It was what I thought would make Mollie unique.
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Lester Curtis wrote:Brodsky's character seems -- well, uncharacteristic, for someone in his position; I can't figure out a reason for his attitudes toward Mollie (though the reason for her attitude toward him is abundantly clear).
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storyguy wrote:My user name is Storyguy, but I am Dennis Wild the author of the short story Mollie. As a published nonfiction writer this is my first foray into fiction -- horror fiction here. I opened the topic hoping for feedback, positive and negative, from the site's readers. Thanks.
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kailhofer wrote:Brodsky may have been a bit one dimensional,
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