MAVEN Haiku by Denny E. Marshall


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Post March 06, 2014, 04:57:11 PM

MAVEN Haiku by Denny E. Marshall

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Post March 10, 2014, 08:11:42 PM

Re: MAVEN Haiku by Denny E. Marshall

Haikus are tricky for me because the brevity either works for me or it doesn't. This time it worked.

Surprisingly dense mood, coming from pulling in mention of the MAVEN expedition. The first four lines open up a typical yet "dull" domestic drama. "Lost at work... yeah, yeah." Typical snipey wife...

Then the last line uncorks "I work on Mars Rovers for NASA"!
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Post March 19, 2014, 12:20:56 AM

Re: MAVEN Haiku by Denny E. Marshall

not really a haiku, more of a now what do I do.

the greater good here
the flag positioned there
it has a nice ring

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