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Post June 21, 2005, 08:46:20 PM

Nightwatch: Jigsaw Creek By Robert Moriyama

Why aren't all you cluckers giving Robert feedback about his story? ;) (Totally kidding! Honest!)<br><br>I told Robert what I thought about it a long time ago. I don't remember what I said, but I probably hated it because you couldn't smell the furniture polish in the CE offices, or some such sensory input fiddle faddle. (But it would have helped, I promise! :))<br><br>This is a good yarn--snappy and interesting. Plus, no one, myself included, can write smartass Simon and sassy Stephanie like Robert can. Take a bow, Mister, or pat yourself on the back if you prefer. You deserve it.<br><br>Nate
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Post June 21, 2005, 10:09:39 PM

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Why aren't all you cluckers giving Robert feedback about his story? ;) (Totally kidding! Honest!)

I told Robert what I thought about it a long time ago. I don't remember what I said, but I probably hated it because you couldn't smell the furniture polish in the CE offices, or some such sensory input fiddle faddle. (But it would have helped, I promise! :))

This is a good yarn--snappy and interesting. Plus, no one, myself included, can write smartass Simon and sassy Stephanie like Robert can. Take a bow, Mister, or pat yourself on the back if you prefer. You deserve it.

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Post June 26, 2005, 03:26:29 PM

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I loved the concept behind this story. Human minds linked into a distributed supercomputer. Not only is this a neat theory, it also allows more organic elements with the injection of the human subconscious. This is a rich playground for a writer.<br><br>Definitely saw some elements of cyberpunk, not only with the "Black Ice" as specifically mentioned by Stephanie, but also with genetically-enhanced goons and the merger of human mind/computers. A warning to readers, however, who may or may not be intrigued on by this comment: stylistically, it follows previous Nightwatch stories and not Gibson's dense writing style saturated with figurative language.<br><br>It always interests me how different writers interpret Simon and Stephanie’s relationship. It is subtle and complex, sometimes a father-daughter dynamic like Kate’s Cardenio, other times strictly peers as in Jeff’s Dimension’s Gate, and here where there’s an unrequited romantic element (poor Simon). It’s like good abstract art that depends upon the perspective of the viewer.<br><br>Robert writes snappy and humorous dialogue. This gives the story a lighter tone. There’s only spot where I thought the dialogue was a bit over-the-top. It was when Simon was apologizing in advance to the guard that he would need to knock him unconscious. It seemed to drag out a bit.<br><br>I’m also a bit surprised there wasn’t more focus on the ethics of CE linking human minds together. Simon and Stephanie seemed a bit glib about the concept. Then again, I’m a Com Sci major, so these things tend to weigh on me a bit more than most people.<br><br>Very good story. As a side note to the Nightwatch writers, does anyone see a possible connection between Robert’s human-driven supercomputer and Dan’s Zod in his upcoming story? No need to get into too much depth to avoid spoilers (ah, what a tease I am!)<br>
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Post June 26, 2005, 05:00:30 PM

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Oh my God -- a SECOND comment. Now, if only it was from somebody who ISN'T working on a Nightwatch story, I'd know that the series must have more than six or seven or eight readers in total.<br><br>The world is catching up to some of the tech in 'cyberpunk' stories. Computer-controlled and myoelectric prosthetics are becoming more common and more sophisticated; interfaces between hardware and 'wetware' are being developed (viz. the recent issue of Scientific American, from which the term 'neuromorphic chip' was lifted). And the idea that 'gene therapy' may replace steroids as the shortcut to superhuman musculature has already been circulating for some time (would it count as 'doping' in Olympic competition?).<br><br>Fortunately, there's no sign of Keanu Reeves as a data courier in this story. (viz. the film version of Johnny Mnemonic)!<br><br>Robert M.
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Post June 27, 2005, 12:43:13 AM

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Oh my God -- a SECOND comment.  Now, if only it was from somebody who ISN'T working on a Nightwatch story, I'd know that the series must have more than six or seven or eight readers in total.

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<br><br>Patience, m'lad.  I'm sure there'll be more acomin'.<br>I've been on it for a couple of days now on and off.  My poor eyesight won't let me read too much at one time.  Even the short ones bother me reading on screen (printed material doesn't bother me much.)  <br><br>Donald "Mr. Magoo" S.<br>
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Post June 27, 2005, 07:38:56 AM

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Patience, m'lad. I'm sure there'll be more acomin'.
I've been on it for a couple of days now on and off. My poor eyesight won't let me read too much at one time. Even the short ones bother me reading on screen (printed material doesn't bother me much.)

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<br><br>Ooh, you're going to want to print out the next few Nightwatch installments, then. In a large font.<br><br>Robert "bifocals very soon" M.
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Post June 27, 2005, 02:02:18 PM

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Ooh, you're going to want to print out the next few Nightwatch installments, then. In a large font.

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<br><br><br>Pregnant idea!<br><br>Donald
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Post June 27, 2005, 02:30:49 PM

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Pregnant idea!

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<br><br>The appropriate responses to that remark are:<br> :o<br>and possibly<br> ???<br><br>Robert 'Confused Again' M.
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Post June 27, 2005, 02:44:36 PM

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Gonna take a *loooooot* of paper that way. And some of my sketches will look really bad blown up larger. <br>I'm going to have to solve a formatting glitch in the last third of the story. One of the fonts get's really off-scale in the print-out version. It might look weird in IE, as well. It looks normal in my Mozilla browser, but the printouts all show the same font size glitch showing up scattered through the last third of the story.<br>Jigsaw Creek does stretch the Nightwatch characters in new directions. I think that they're growing. Robert's characters always evolve, which adds to their appeal to the readers. Series work seems to focus Mr. Moriyama's talents for developing characters, forcing their evolution, to a white-hot spotlight. And his talent for dialog is well explored here in this story, also.<br>I can't wait for next season, when Robert's next Nightwatch should appear!<br>Dan<br>
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Post June 27, 2005, 05:29:27 PM

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I finally finished reading Jigsaw Creek. Not much to say except that I thoroughly enjoyed it. Really a super good story. On a scale of one to ten for entertainment, I'd give this one a ten! <br><br>I thought the story was well written. Show/tell was well balanced. Sensory input was just right, not overdone. Dialog (especially the repartee between Simon and Stephanie), imagery, characterization, and description were all well handled. Exposition was neither too much nor too little.<br><br>All in all, a great thirty minutes of enjoyable reading (even if it took me three days). :-)<br><br><br>
Gonna take a *loooooot* of paper that way. And some of my sketches will look really bad blown up larger.
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<br><br>Yes. I hadn't counted on the reams of paper that would be used up in making copies. Jigsaw Creek was 17,000 words; using font size 12 would fill forty pages. Blowing it up to font size 14 would fill lots more pages! And there is just a wee bit o' Scottish blood in me. (And in past times, I've had some Scotch in me...)<br><br>Donald
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Post June 27, 2005, 07:29:29 PM

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... there is just a wee bit o' Scottish blood in me. (And in past times, I've had some Scotch in me...)

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<br><br>Hmm. Wouldn't that be 'there's a wee bit of blood in my Scotch'? (The doctor prescribes three choruses of 'Brigadoon' and a film festival featuring Mike Myers as the 'if it's no Scottish, it's crap!' guy from SNL and, of course, Scrooge McDuck.)<br><br>Robert M.
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Post July 14, 2005, 10:18:19 AM

Jigsaw Creek By Robert Moriyama

1. I guess it is time for comments by someone who is not a Nightwatchite. I've trolled through the archives, but this is only my second real-time tale. <br><br>2. The concept of people as nodes in a network is fascinating. I think I would be more concerned about the implants affects on people than the people effecting the programs. It would be a great method of mind control. Talk about Thought Police! <br>But that would be a different story. (hint, hint. nudge, nudge. ;)) <br><br>3. Banter amongst the Nightwatch crew was entertaining - I wonder, however if it was not over done at the end when Stephanie is recuperating.<br>This tale did not include much of the institute's boss. The vitriol between Simon and Callow seems overblown in some other stories I've read, tho' I could just be missing the full range of backstory. <br><br>4. The characterization of the townsfolk was believable and well done. <br>The hotel clerk was chatty and funny. Best character in the story.<br>The bookstore owner was a nice contrast to the clerk.<br>Dr. Chandramurtri was the weakest character. He seemed to loose faith in his work too quickly for my taste. But -- on the other hand -- if he hadn't, it would've been the cliched Mad Scientist.<br>I liked how the Ex-miner refused to believe he had done anything wrong while part of the network.<br><br>5. This was an enjoyable addition to the Nightwatch saga.<br>
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