The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello


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Post July 06, 2011, 02:29:18 PM

The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello

Might as well call this "Fractured Fairy Tales a la Rick."

Slapdash editing of technical details. Lots of fun nonetheless.
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Post July 06, 2011, 04:31:37 PM

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Lester Curtis wrote:Might as well call this "Fractured Fairy Tales a la Rick."

Slapdash editing of technical details. Lots of fun nonetheless.


Humph. Why if this uppity Curtis fellow submitted stuff to said slapdash editor, he might show a little more respect...

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Post July 06, 2011, 06:13:14 PM

Re: The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello

technical details? This is a fantasy, a love story, and dragons and non-virgins protected, and brain addled knights, general populations in the dark and all that.
Suspend disbelief and SUBMIT!


Technical details, inconsistencies or what? I read it a number of times and rediscovered a few mistakes in some sentences, but technical matters, not sure what you mean by that when unless you are speaking about the writing itself and how they would apply. That's a different matter, but I'm still at a loss.

Suggestion: If you do have a comment like that, for me anyway either lay out the evidence and or email me PM so I can look back and see what you are talking about.

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Post July 06, 2011, 06:47:50 PM

Re: The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello

Sorry for the misunderstanding, Rick -- I classify "technical details" as things like spelling and punctuation. Little stuff. For example, I think I got snagged someplace when you used "and" when you should have used "an." Gotta watch those; spell-check won't flag 'em.

I really liked the story. I t was lot of fun.
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Post July 07, 2011, 03:50:28 AM

Re: The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello

Who's your Daddy

By Puff the magic dragon

Living by the sea.
Living in fantasy.
Living is living no matter what you be.
***
A king and his daughter, at least that is what he believes.
Puff daddy, now that is some kind of dragon you will never see.
Knights now, this is something you can believe.
***
This is the fantasy the king lived in, thinking her daughter was not a product of sin.
Grinning dragon, sly little beast.
Grinning dragon, Puff daddy, what kind of daddy could he ever be.
***
Years ago, the Queen bed the beast.
Puff did more than smile when he released his seed.
With the cover of magic, this sin was hidden from the king.
***
Daughter now, pretty, young, pleasing to all who could see.
Daughter of Puff or daughter of King?
To her, her father was the king.
To puff, he was a dragon and did as he pleased.
***
Dragonette the princess became.
Lover now to her incestuous father forsaking her father, the king.
Dragon flesh merging, sharing a magical venereal disease.
I wonder what child dragon this new merging will be?
***
(Richard, I could not resist the temptation)
The end
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Post July 07, 2011, 06:58:21 AM

Re: The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello

Your review,
The Dragons of West Virginia Meet the Medeci Family,
Robin,
Now that's the strangest review I have had on this one.
I don't even know where to begin.

As an aside, I suggest that you find a copy of Princess Smartypants by Babette Cole.
It's a story I used to read to my daughter, and I still have a copy. It's still just as good now as it was then, 20 something years ago. You might find it entertaining and it is not PC, ever.

This is P.S. all grown up, if you will.



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Post July 08, 2011, 08:10:32 AM

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This story reminded me a lot... a lot... of something else I've read before somewhere. Did you perhaps publish an earlier version here on Aphelion?
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Post July 08, 2011, 08:47:23 AM

Re: The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello

It may have been a FLASH entry and I expanded it. I don't keep track of the flash entries when I expand them. I have them in a file and could dig.

This is one I reread all the time along with a few others. I'd love to have this one illustrated. It might pay for me to back to art school.

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