Post October 09, 2011, 05:48:11 AM

The Turning by Matthew Acheson

At one point in this story, the author gives a nod to Bangor Maine - home of Steven King. Unfortunately this tale of terror loses it's way in the middle the way many of King's stories do.
I liked the beginning, the way Matthew set up what could have become some dialog, but it descended quickly into a narration, becoming preachy at times and superhero-y.
I liked the poker angle - it would be sort of great to have a special ability to help you win during Texas hold em or 5 card stud. But the description of his abduction falls short. That's the thing about classic horror - the reader needs more than a glancing blow at description of said terror to make it interesting.
Towards the end the author throws out a Lovecraft-esk description of the things that go bump in the night, and I heart Lovecraft - but it's not enough to save this story.
The premise was good, but the author needs to bump up the descriptive side to his tale - and the dialog (which could be stumbling, but at least present).
Since the house is on fire - at least let us warm ourselves.