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The Husband by Jeremy Kuban
Not too bad . . . the biggest problem I had with this story is in a setting detail: you get about a third into the story before the word "candlelight" appears. Prior to that, I had no clue that this didn't happen in a more modern setting. It makes sense in retrospect, but allows some confusion at first.
I was raised by humans. What's your excuse?