The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello


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Post July 06, 2011, 02:29:18 PM

The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello

Might as well call this "Fractured Fairy Tales a la Rick."

Slapdash editing of technical details. Lots of fun nonetheless.
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Post July 06, 2011, 04:31:37 PM

Re: The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello

Lester Curtis wrote:Might as well call this "Fractured Fairy Tales a la Rick."

Slapdash editing of technical details. Lots of fun nonetheless.


Humph. Why if this uppity Curtis fellow submitted stuff to said slapdash editor, he might show a little more respect...

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Post July 06, 2011, 06:47:50 PM

Re: The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello

Sorry for the misunderstanding, Rick -- I classify "technical details" as things like spelling and punctuation. Little stuff. For example, I think I got snagged someplace when you used "and" when you should have used "an." Gotta watch those; spell-check won't flag 'em.

I really liked the story. I t was lot of fun.
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Post July 07, 2011, 03:50:28 AM

Re: The Dark kNight: A Love Story by Richard Tornello

Who's your Daddy

By Puff the magic dragon

Living by the sea.
Living in fantasy.
Living is living no matter what you be.
***
A king and his daughter, at least that is what he believes.
Puff daddy, now that is some kind of dragon you will never see.
Knights now, this is something you can believe.
***
This is the fantasy the king lived in, thinking her daughter was not a product of sin.
Grinning dragon, sly little beast.
Grinning dragon, Puff daddy, what kind of daddy could he ever be.
***
Years ago, the Queen bed the beast.
Puff did more than smile when he released his seed.
With the cover of magic, this sin was hidden from the king.
***
Daughter now, pretty, young, pleasing to all who could see.
Daughter of Puff or daughter of King?
To her, her father was the king.
To puff, he was a dragon and did as he pleased.
***
Dragonette the princess became.
Lover now to her incestuous father forsaking her father, the king.
Dragon flesh merging, sharing a magical venereal disease.
I wonder what child dragon this new merging will be?
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(Richard, I could not resist the temptation)
The end

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