Gaia by Dave Weaver


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Post August 04, 2010, 08:52:14 PM

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I have to go with the technical comment on this one. The last word-object is "prais". Now, I'm thinking it's a typo, unless someone uncorks a beautifully obscure word.
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Post September 08, 2010, 07:22:09 PM

prais

I don't even see prais in this poem. Huh? Overall, it seems as if the author is trying too hard to 'save the whales'. Going Green is overdone in media and underdone in real life. Its rhymes are too easy also. Its a good first stab at the subject matter, but it just doesn't gel for me.
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Post September 08, 2010, 07:43:14 PM

The last word-object is "prais".


Tao, what were you reading?

As for the poem . . . the subject matter is too preachy, and that rhyme scheme -- ka-THUD ka-THUD ka-THUD ka-THUD . . . ought to be punishable, but I'm at a loss as to what an appropriate sentence would be . . .

. . . in its favor -- at least it could be understood, instead of needing to be decoded.
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