By the Numbers


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Post May 21, 2010, 11:18:48 AM

By the Numbers

Sorry to be so simple - but, without any punctuation at all, this piece of poetry doesn't make a lot of sense to me. I checked the other poems to see if this were a trend - 16 lines of words with no punctuation - but they all had periods and commas and such.
Mozart was criticized for not giving audiences a big 'boom' at the end of songs so people would know when to clap: maybe the rest of the troupe will understand it as is.
What about it, fellow Aphelionites? Can someone explain this to me?
Since the house is on fire - at least let us warm ourselves.
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Post May 21, 2010, 11:49:43 AM

BUY THE NUMBERS

it's got commas and all that. Try reading it staccato.

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Post May 21, 2010, 02:48:36 PM

the run-on sentence

From Nowhere, from outside the known,
Sticky with their own purpose, they come.
They are Science made fiction: elided (slurred over, as with a syllable), a finger smeared
Across the straight graphite line.

Into the print of a human animal
It scuffs its tracks across the problem, over the numbers;
Doubling, remaining, and slicing each other
Into fractions of themselves.

It scratches them into loops and angles and slashes,
Something of the language remaining
In the fires that are running, subdividing
Up and down the fibers.
There is a dark line, an impulse
A bright line, a number, a solution.

Fireworks and careful lines and bats swoop
Over the hide of a spaceship parked
Across the divider bar.
Numbers are flung
From phasers, prickling with divisive purpose.

By the numbers we are burned.
Since the house is on fire - at least let us warm ourselves.

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