Mother by Brian Douglas Graham


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Post August 31, 2009, 01:55:44 PM

Mother by Brian Douglas Graham

This one reminded me a bit of "Quintessence" by I. D. Weis
(http://www.aphelion-webzine.com/shorts/ ... sence.html) in its vivid, nightmarish imagery. But it differs in that it blends gritty urban life (drug-addicted sex trade workers) with the more fantastic elements -- a collision between two dystopian worlds.

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Post September 09, 2009, 02:16:58 PM

Read this one a while ago and wasn't moved to comment on it. Not sure why, except perhaps I had little to say by way of critique. It's a good read and sharp change of pace from the typical stories found here.

If anything, I would have preferred a deeper development of the narrator.
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Post September 09, 2009, 03:14:00 PM

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unforgibbon wrote:Read this one a while ago and wasn't moved to comment on it. Not sure why, except perhaps I had little to say by way of critique. It's a good read and sharp change of pace from the typical stories found here.

If anything, I would have preferred a deeper development of the narrator.


On that basis, authors whose stories get no comments at all might be justified in thinking, "I guess I didn't do anything wrong -- but I didn't do anything great, either."

As for the narrator -- at the end, he had developed some depth. About three to six inches under Mother's skin, I would guess... :twisted:
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Post September 09, 2009, 03:51:59 PM

Re: Mother

Robert_Moriyama wrote:On that basis, authors whose stories get no comments at all might be justified in thinking, "I guess I didn't do anything wrong -- but I didn't do anything great, either."

As for the narrator -- at the end, he had developed some depth. About three to six inches under Mother's skin, I would guess... :twisted:


Yeah, yeah, that's a good point. It is kind of a disservice to the writer, but then, it also kind of falls into the realm of one's available time. For me, some criticisms slap me in the face and I find it easier to formulate a set of observations. For this work, which was pretty solid, those observations were not leaping off the page (so to speak), and I haven't had the time to revisit this with an eye at tearing it down and looking for things. For that I apologize to the author.

Again, this was a positive departure from the norm for Aphelion and enjoyable. Recommend it to anyone who hasn't read it yet.

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