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Re: POLL: APHELION FLASH FICTION CONTEST:July 2015

PostPosted: August 18, 2015, 12:09:34 AM
by jto
Thank you all!

Re: POLL: APHELION FLASH FICTION CONTEST:July 2015

PostPosted: August 18, 2015, 09:26:04 AM
by ente per ente
I just have too much on my plate and it is someone else's turn. My replacement is great!


This is really a pity!!! :shock: :shock: :shock: You did a wonderful job here on Aphelion, we'll miss you, sure thing!!! :o

Re: POLL: APHELION FLASH FICTION CONTEST:July 2015

PostPosted: August 20, 2015, 09:59:30 PM
by TaoPhoenix
ente per ente wrote:
I just have too much on my plate and it is someone else's turn. My replacement is great!


This is really a pity!!! :shock: :shock: :shock: You did a wonderful job here on Aphelion, we'll miss you, sure thing!!! :o


You should use the thing/spell that Hermione Granger did in Harry Potter. As some of y'all recall, she was the studious one and liked it so much she used magic to be in two places at once! (But it began to tire even her out!)

Re: POLL: APHELION FLASH FICTION CONTEST:July 2015 Tao Votes

PostPosted: August 20, 2015, 10:04:46 PM
by TaoPhoenix
Well I don't often post my full workup, but especially in light of the scoring glitch, I wanted to recall what I was thinking ... sigh ... I have such a short memory!

So ... Waste Management ...

Yep, the "Cryo-Jar" is "typical decent grade SciFi" usage of the requirement ... and then it earned a 10 in challenge (and I basically NEVER give 10's!) because I *only now* (then, when voting) recall that a Marine is a "Jar-Head" - so I REALLY like it when a story nails something I did NOT see coming! The rest of it was solid "hard boiled fiction" in some kind of 2150 setting or whenever.



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Aphelion Flash July 2015
Tao Votes
Waste Management
1) Overall: 8
2) Characterization: 7
3) Plot: 8
4) Setting: 6
5) Dialog: 8
6) Challenge: 10
- Two separate Jars! Cryo-Jar and Marine "Jarhead" !
- Some typos

The Beast, Within
1) Overall: 6
2) Characterization: 5
3) Plot: 4
4) Setting: 6
5) Dialog: 7
6) Challenge: 7
Who is "I" and who is Rednae?
Dialogue a bit vague?
Setup - sounds like a Sapce Epic only to be a letdown?
"Alice in Wonderland" ending.

A Fairy Familiar Tale
1) Overall: 7
2) Characterization: 4
3) Plot: 7
4) Setting: 6
5) Dialog: 6
6) Challenge: 7
I get the pun that it's a "very familiar tale"!
That's the extra Overall point.

Twenty Questions
1) Overall: 6
2) Characterization: 3
3) Plot: 6
4) Setting: 3
5) Dialog: 4
6) Challenge: 6
Why 1963 exactly? "Details should matter"
Before or after JFK assassinated?
(Ohio / PA)
The prize of free trip should have been mentioned up front!
poor / unfocused / wasted questions
Since the whole story is the questions it derails it.
Someone will probably beat her at it!
Someone's fast draft story like I had to do before?
plot concept original
Overall is 6 because of the ending

The Case of the Calendar Jar Crimes...
1) Overall: 8
2) Characterization: 5
3) Plot: 9
4) Setting: 9
5) Dialog: 3
6) Challenge: 10
Definitely something that could be part of a world!
Feb 29th - Leap Year! What does that mean?
Calendar - not just showing up but part of the context!
Dialog - "not zero" - but 1 line is thin ...

Flash Suppressor
1) Overall: 6
2) Characterization: 8
3) Plot: 5
4) Setting: 6
5) Dialog:
6) Challenge: 7
"Cold Open" - I don't like it. "He states..."
See my notes on "set up the world first"
Satire on over-regulation and "dressing up bathroom humor" but it falls a bit flat for me

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Re: POLL: APHELION FLASH FICTION CONTEST:July 2015

PostPosted: August 21, 2015, 04:17:42 AM
by ente per ente
Feb 29th - Leap Year! What does that mean?


It means that the peculiar crime/Killing that was set to happen that day will only occur once every four years, and not before, by luck :D :wink: ...well, it would probably give the detectives more time to find the killer of that peculiar species and stop him, but it did not in the end, because they only thought of their next retirement which was at hand... ::)

Re: POLL: APHELION FLASH FICTION CONTEST:July 2015

PostPosted: August 22, 2015, 05:05:55 PM
by TaoPhoenix
ente per ente wrote:
Feb 29th - Leap Year! What does that mean?


It means that the peculiar crime/Killing that was set to happen that day will only occur once every four years, and not before, by luck :D :wink: ...well, it would probably give the detectives more time to find the killer of that peculiar species and stop him, but it did not in the end, because they only thought of their next retirement which was at hand... ::)


Well, those notes were written "live stream" while reading the stories - so of course I know what a leap year is; but I was trying to figure out how that other group selected a "rare" date as a possible compromise, except they then slightly ruined it all by jumping too fast later. I was just puzzling over how if they kept to their rules, allowing four years of attempts at progress is remarkably restrained for a terrorist group!

Re: POLL: APHELION FLASH FICTION CONTEST:July 2015

PostPosted: August 24, 2015, 02:52:37 AM
by ente per ente
allowing four years of attempts at progress is remarkably restrained for a terrorist group!


An alien terrorist group :lol: ... eh,eh...if history goes on, maybe we'll see also them in the future, I mean, some terrorist groups from alien worlds at work on Earth, regretfully...if they are not already at work in this field as of today...eh,eh :x O0 :!: there is also room for new madmen on this planet, unfortunately... :roll: