The Redoubt


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Post December 16, 2007, 06:39:51 PM

The Redoubt

This story really gets you in the gut. Nicely paced, a good character driven theme and a particularly poignant final line.

The only thing I had trouble with was the idea of deletion for the copy, kind of brutal. However, the charm of the prose more than made up for it.

Nice one Gareth.

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Post December 16, 2007, 10:39:20 PM

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A fine little sci-fi story full of spare prose and romantic sensibility. I enjoyed it.

Once or twice I felt the pound signs (###) were unnecessary since there was no change in scene or time, but that was rare. Mostly they were well placed.

There was also this small editing oversight:

A little while later we were we were sitting on the smooth flagstone floor, just inside the open door, watching the rain.

Granted, the copy/simulation idea has been done before, even in Star Trek, but this was a nice addition to that vein.

Overall, very good.


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Post December 20, 2007, 08:18:10 AM

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Somewhere out there, there could be a copy of me exploring the stars, and I'll never know...

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Post January 02, 2008, 10:30:51 AM

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The only thing I had trouble with was the idea of deletion for the copy, kind of brutal.


I agree. But it was necessary in terms of the story.
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Post January 07, 2008, 11:27:12 AM

Re: The Redoubt

I thought this a pretty decent story.

The concept of the last remnants of sentience gathering together at the end of the universe would make an excellent backdrop for a novel or series of novels, a sort of Riverworld theme but on a grander scale.
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Post January 07, 2008, 12:12:05 PM

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I thought this a pretty decent story.

The concept of the last remnants of sentience gathering together at the end of the universe would make an excellent backdrop for a novel or series of novels, a sort of Riverworld theme but on a grander scale.


It would also make a great place for a Restaurant ... but Douglas Adams already did that one.
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Post January 20, 2008, 06:03:27 AM

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The setting for this story was inspired by a dusty week I spent in France at the age of sixteen, camping with friends in the grounds of an Ecumenical monastery near Cluny. Although the characters and events in the story are mostly fictitious, I’ve tried to describe the countryside, the village church and the thunderstorm as closely as I can to the way I remember them.

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Post January 30, 2008, 06:53:18 AM

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Interesting. I did have a bit of trouble working out how he was sitting near the door with his back to the wall watching the rain without sitting out in it... but that's minor. An excellent story, and I liked the idea of a UFO that takes nothing but photographs (no matter how exact they may be) and leaves nothing at all (to paraphrase Baden Powell, I think it was).

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