The In-Crowd By Jon Hartless


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Post May 18, 2004, 09:52:03 PM

The In-Crowd By Jon Hartless

The path this story took was wholly unexpected, and therefore entertaining, if a little over the top! I enjoyed your humurously cynical look at the superficial world of consumerism and commercialism, and I noticed you slipped in a reference to Brave New World (I assume you meant it that way) a classic story taking these ideas to the extreme: 'New is better than old' 'Ending is better than mending' 'The more stitches the less riches'... Pohl and Kornbluth also wrote an excellent book examining the consumer world from both ends- 'The Space Merchants'.<br><br>A few inconsistencies weren't enough to make the story incomprehensible but they do draw the reader out of the story. For example, Martin ordered a cheese sandwich then later finished off his ham sandwich. Later in the story, Knox Co. is destroyed but is then triumphant (I assume you meant to write King Co. there).<br><br>On the plausability side, the building collapsed, burying everyone in it, yet Martin is able to simply walk away- how? And how did a yellow vapour destroy buildings and cars but not physically destroy people? I realise the story is not intended to be very realistic, but I think it would work better if the logic was ironed out a little bit- we still want to believe in it.<br><br>I especially liked the character of Martin and the ending. A lot happened in a short space of time- didn't get time to even think about being bored, or pausing for a second- well done!<br><br>GG
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Post May 19, 2004, 08:42:05 AM

Re: The In-Crowd By Jon Hartless

And how did a yellow vapour destroy buildings and cars but not physically destroy people?
<br><br>It was my understanding from reading the story, that it was the meteor that caused all the destruction. After the meteor had done the damage, the yellow vapour fell on everything, turning all the dead people into zombies.<br><br>Kevin<br>
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Post May 19, 2004, 02:38:01 PM

Re: The In-Crowd By Jon Hartless

... I think Kevin is correct -- the damage to buildings and cars was caused directly by the meteor (a shock wave/fire storm? One would think there might be survivors in the opposite hemisphere in that case ...). Anyone who was outside at the time was probably vaporized or burned beyond the point where reanimation might occur. The zombies were people who were sheltered from the initial effects, but emerged from their places of refuge too soon and succumbed to toxins, heat, whatever, and were then revived by the yellow dust, or who were killed inside buildings, and revived when yellow dust infiltrated through broken windows and ventilation systems. Only the bunker-like, poorly ventilated Arena (in that immediate vicinity) completely protected its occupants from both the initial blast and the yellow dust.<br><br>This story is a black-humor unholy mating between American Psycho (where status, as defined by the elegance of one's business cards and clothing, is worth killing over) and Dawn of the Dead (the recent remake of which is quite good, by the way). While it IS a bit over the top, the transformation of mindless consumers into Mindless Consumers (of anything they can catch) is a lot of fun.
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Post May 19, 2004, 09:18:08 PM

Re: The In-Crowd By Jon Hartless

Re-read the passage... the meteor 'skipped' the upper atmosphere and 'altered' the air before the yellow toxin was mentioned, so yes, you're right about that, and that the zombies appear to emerge from buildings. <br><br>My only excuse- I was so keen to see where this was going, I must have zipped over this part too fast!<br><br>The Mindless Consumer- I like that analogy.<br><br>GG
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