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Post July 11, 2005, 10:16:51 PM

Nightwatch:  The Peacekeeper by Robert M.

... Mine was better.<br><br>Agree? Disagree? Discuss at length. Grammar and spelling will be considered when determining your final grade.<br><br>My Simon would never have done the horrible things that Robert M.'s Simon does (er, did) in this story. Dislocate every major joint in the bad guy's body, sure. But not ... well, you'll see.<br><br>JRM
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Post July 11, 2005, 11:56:35 PM

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Just to let the readers know, Robert graciously agreed to step in at the last minute and write an emergency replacement story to take the place of one that fell through. We've been TALKING about this story for awhile, but the bulk of it was written in less than a month. Yes, that's what I meant. LESS THAN A MONTH.<br><br>If for no other reason than the fact that he crafted this many quality words that quickly, I think Robert has earned your comments and critiques this month. :)<br><br><br><br>--Jeff Williams
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Post July 12, 2005, 12:14:53 AM

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... We've been TALKING about this story for awhile, but the bulk of it was written in less than a month. Yes, that's what I meant. LESS THAN A MONTH.

If for no other reason than the fact that he crafted this many quality words that quickly, I think Robert has earned your comments and critiques this month. :)


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<br><br>Gee, I hope the story isn't ALL 'bulk' (or 'bunk', as the case may be). As for 'quality words', I wonder if I got them in some kind of meaningful order? I DID use the very best spam subject-line and from-address generating software I could find ... as the immortal scribe Loquaciously Q. Spermatoza would say, H0t stokc Tips! pre-approvd M0rtagges?<br><br>Robert M.
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Post July 12, 2005, 07:30:09 PM

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Just to let the readers know, Robert graciously agreed to step in at the last minute and write an emergency replacement story to take the place of one that fell through. We've been TALKING about this story for awhile, but the bulk of it was written in less than a month. Yes, that's what I meant. LESS THAN A MONTH.
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<br>I have to give credit where credit is due.<br><br>After we all found out about Kate's broken wrists, the cry went out to see if anyone could pinch hit. There was no way I could have written a thirty-thousand word story in a month. I simply don't have it in me, and I doubt many other people could have managed it, either. <br><br><br>As far as the story goes, I saw drafts of this and gave him feedback practically every other day, so I promise you that Robert doesn't want to hear another word from me about it.<br><br>Read the story, and (pretty please with sugar on top) tell him what you thought. He would really like to know.<br><br>Nate
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Post July 12, 2005, 08:27:57 PM

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Okay! Okay already! Here's what I think. I read the story and think that if Robert M. can write that many quality words in that short a space of time, there's no reason why he shouldn't be writing and getting paid for it full time. BRAVO! THe accents were right on, and the tempo and style made it nothing short of professional quality to me. I don't read that particular genre much, but 'Peacekeeper' had the pacing and mood that kept me involved.
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Post July 12, 2005, 09:35:11 PM

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... I read the story and think that if Robert M. can write that many quality words in that short a space of time, there's no reason why he shouldn't be writing and getting paid for it full time...
<br><br>Well, there's rent, and car payments, and car insurance (currently MORE than the car payments), and food, and cable, and ISP charges. I mean, if you are independently wealthy (sold your Enron stock just in time?), I have no objections to being a Kept Writer, but otherwise, I think I'd better hold on to the day job for now. (For one thing, the office is AIR CONDITIONED, which my apartment is not. Also, Free Office Supplies!)<br><br>By 'that genre', I am hoping you mean the techno-thriller (as opposed to the techno-thriller satire), as in Cussler / Coonts / Brown, et al. If you mean cheesy spy novel -- actually, I could live with that, too.<br><br>Thank you for the kind (perhaps too kind? Could the Supreme Headquarters Alien Defense Organization be joshing?). This was actually the longest thing I've ever written (the equivalent of several Al Majius stories strung together) ... sort of a quarter-marathon en route to writing something 'novel length'. And to think that I only used to turn out about 2,500 - 5,000 words A YEAR (writing an entry for an annual contest)!<br><br>Robert M.
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Post July 14, 2005, 12:53:36 PM

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This is a great story! Robert already knows everything critical I'd have to post here. I want to encourage everyone who reads this one to post something. This story is not only a great read, but represents an heroic effort on Robert's part to provide a fill-in story when Kate was injured. He turned this one out in a whirlwhind of motion.<br>I, being your average reader, think this one is a really cool adventure that develops Simon's character in a really dramatic way. It gives insight into the Simon/Callow character conflict, as well as developing several heretofore minor Nightwatch characters into much more real individuals.<br>And it's an exiting adventure story as well!<br>Now, I know the story is good. The Nightwatch writers know the story is good. Robert, however, has his doubts.<br>Y'all need to tell him what you think. He really *wants* to know. Only you can help him find out what you really thought of his story. He'll never know what you think if you don't post something.<br>I've been so wrapped up in writing lately that I haven't had time to read all of the stories from the June issue, much less all these new ones for July. Now that I've gotten to a place where I can free up some time, I hopw to catch up on all the reading that I've been missing.<br>Please post comments on everyone's stories. They really need to know what you think.<br>Dan<br>
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Post July 24, 2005, 09:16:13 PM

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I really loved Peacekeeper, and not just because one of the main characters was a relation. :-) If Robert M wrote this one in less than a month, that's something to crow about. I Don't think I could have done as well in a month of Sundays--not even a month of Tuesdays!<br><br>Because of the length, I set out to read this one in four sittings, but got so caught up in the story I ended up reading it in two. And that's only because the wife pulled me away from the computer at bedtime.<br><br>There's not much I can say about the story. There were no major flaws that I could see. I just flat out enjoyed it.<br><br>I once mentioned that a writer's description of characters made little difference to me, because I usually form a picture in my mind based on their dialog and actions. I don't really remember how Robert described Sullivan, but to me he was Donald Sutherland when he played Devlin in "The Eagle Has Landed."<br><br>A super great ending. Loved it.<br><br>Donald
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Post July 24, 2005, 09:41:21 PM

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Gee, and Donald doesn't even have a story in my to-read list ... I'll be a tad suspicious if one shows up tomorrow. (I know, THEY say I'm paranoid. But I'm on to THEM. My neighbor's dog, Son of Sam, tells me all about THEM.)<br><br>Yeah, I guess Sullivan can't look something like a late-40's Richard Harris, since that's what SIMON looks like. So, what other famous Irish face could we use? Oh, never mind -- the next time he appears, he'll have a whole new face anyway.<br><br>Robert M.
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Post August 09, 2005, 10:58:23 AM

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If nothing else Robert should feel pretty energized by completing such a project in so short a time and making such a good show of it. Timely topics and a good balance of research and storytelling. Nice job.<br><br>Dan E.
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Post August 09, 2005, 12:45:50 PM

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If nothing else Robert should feel pretty energized by completing such a project in so short a time and making such a good show of it. Timely topics and a good balance of research and storytelling. Nice job.

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<br><br>On the other hand, the whole 'it's good, considering how fast it was done' thing is not all that reassuring. The question is how people would rate it if they didn't know it was written quickly? (John R. Murray wouldn't care if it was written in one hour or one thousand hours -- he'd still think his was better ...)<br><br>Robert M.<br><br>Robert M.
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Post August 09, 2005, 03:18:24 PM

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Fair enough question, Robert. It's a good read no matter how long it took you to write. However, for anyone who's slugged it out on a piece over 10K words, it's hard to ignore the time frame in which you completed such an entertaining and rich piece of writing.<br><br>Dan E.
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Post August 09, 2005, 06:31:07 PM

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So, it's been up a month, and no one said anything negative about it.<br><br>I think it would be justified for you to thumb your nose at me and all the heat I gave your story before it went up. My critique apparently was way too harsh.<br><br>Fair is fair, after all.<br><br><br>Nate
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Post August 11, 2005, 09:37:36 PM

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Okay, I *finally* finished reading all the stories for this month. And only a week behind schedule. ::)<br><br>This is very nicely done, especially on such short notice. Robert has a knack for interjecting humor. His dialogue is extremely funny, and I laughed aloud reading the part where Simon almost falls victim to the ergonomic chair.<br><br>I do have one question though. Why did Simon bring all those pilots with him to Indonesia? Wouldn't it have made more sense to bring operatives more suited for a ground mission?<br>
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Post August 11, 2005, 11:02:43 PM

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Okay, I *finally* finished reading all the stories for this month. And only a week behind schedule. ::)

This is very nicely done, especially on such short notice. Robert has a knack for interjecting humor. His dialogue is extremely funny, and I laughed aloud reading the part where Simon almost falls victim to the ergonomic chair.

I do have one question though. Why did Simon bring all those pilots with him to Indonesia? Wouldn't it have made more sense to bring operatives more suited for a ground mission?
<br><br>Nightwatch has relatively few covert ops troops (i.e., those with the skills and the clearance to play secret agent / commando), which is why the Lower Echelon accepts (although they may not like) the involvement of Stephanie Keel (a very valuable person at home base) and Tom Weldon (a civilian!) on some of Simon's missions in the field. In this case, Tom and Stephanie were both unable to participate (Tom being waaaaay out of town, and Stephanie still recovering from the injuries sustained in Jigsaw Creek).<br><br>It so happens that the pilots -- all with military training and past involvement in Lower Echelon-sponsored missions -- WERE the best-qualified personnel available on short notice, particularly since three flight crews were needed to make the trip as quickly as possible. (As bizarre as it might seem, they needed to conform with the rules for maximum flying hours in a day). So: the six pilots HAD to be on the plane; they were aware of Nightwatch's clandestine operations; and they had at least some military training and experience (hand-to-hand, small arms, etc.). Waste not, want not ...<br><br>Jeff, do you agree with my take on the Institute's shortage of suitable personnel?<br><br>Robert M.
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Post August 11, 2005, 11:20:19 PM

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Tom took a lot of people with him off waaay out of town. Nightwatch would have been hard-pressed to locate better operatives than those they already employed. Better suited than whatever leftovers they could hire from any other agency. Callow might have foreseen that. He could be up to something. Power struggles among the upper rungs? LOL!<br>Dan<br>
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Post August 11, 2005, 11:21:03 PM

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I do agree!<br><br>The Lower Echelon has personnel to work with, but it is a relatively small number, and not everyone involved is qualified for every situation.<br><br>My feeling, also, is that anyone cleared to fly Nightbird One would have to be well aware of the Lower Echelon.<br><br><br>Thanks,<br>Jeff

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