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Sum of All Changes by Tomasz Jarząb

PostPosted: April 20, 2018, 09:38:06 PM
by Lester Curtis
Yike. When you ask what's the worst that can happen, there's supposed to be a limit ...

Re: Sum of All Changes by Tomasz Jarząb

PostPosted: April 21, 2018, 08:22:43 AM
by Tom J
So... You like this story or not? I'm very curious :)

Re: Sum of All Changes by Tomasz Jarząb

PostPosted: April 21, 2018, 12:00:45 PM
by Lester Curtis
Yes, it's quite well done ... just awfully dismal.

You've done the most important thing, which is to make the reader care about the character. And, with your countdown, you've gotten the reader to hope that this character can escape his predicament and find his way to a better life--

--and then, he loses it all, and degrades himself in the process.

No happy ending here, but it's a good piece of work.

Re: Sum of All Changes by Tomasz Jarząb

PostPosted: April 22, 2018, 06:31:33 AM
by Tom J
Thanks a lot. All because of my innate pessimism. It's good for dystopia (cyberpunk), but isn't necessary good for the reader. Again, thanks for your feedback :)