Sum of All Changes by Tomasz Jarząb


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Post April 20, 2018, 09:38:06 PM

Sum of All Changes by Tomasz Jarząb

Yike. When you ask what's the worst that can happen, there's supposed to be a limit ...
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Post April 21, 2018, 08:22:43 AM

Re: Sum of All Changes by Tomasz Jarząb

So... You like this story or not? I'm very curious :)
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Post April 21, 2018, 12:00:45 PM

Re: Sum of All Changes by Tomasz Jarząb

Yes, it's quite well done ... just awfully dismal.

You've done the most important thing, which is to make the reader care about the character. And, with your countdown, you've gotten the reader to hope that this character can escape his predicament and find his way to a better life--

--and then, he loses it all, and degrades himself in the process.

No happy ending here, but it's a good piece of work.
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Post April 22, 2018, 06:31:33 AM

Re: Sum of All Changes by Tomasz Jarząb

Thanks a lot. All because of my innate pessimism. It's good for dystopia (cyberpunk), but isn't necessary good for the reader. Again, thanks for your feedback :)

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