Post November 10, 2016, 05:17:39 PM

Reborn by C. E. Gee

Starting with a definition, as such, didn’t draw me into the story. I think you could have worked the information into the piece by showing the reader what they looked like. The same thing happened with “RU-1832 was a battlebot.” You could have deleted this and written, “The Old Man serviced and maintained RU-1832’s battlebot squad.” Still, it was a good piece.