The Comedown by Craig Steven


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Post November 03, 2014, 12:22:08 PM

The Comedown by Craig Steven

If I get this right, he's in an exoskeleton or some such and continues to do what ever he's doing?

This isn't science fiction anymore.


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Post November 03, 2014, 08:54:12 PM

Re: The Comedown by Craig Steven

I took it that he was dead (or just about to be), and experiencing hell. The med techs zapped his heart and brought him back to life, as I saw it.
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Post November 04, 2014, 10:12:54 AM

Re: The Comedown by Craig Steven

I got what Nate got. He is being resuscitated and seeing hell.
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Post November 04, 2014, 12:06:44 PM

Re: The Comedown by Craig Steven

Having someone or ting in control of your body in a situation you have no control over can be hell. I still read this as a view from inside the exoskeleton/brain awareness of a combat soldier where control of bodily movements are overridden of a physically dead or severely wounded body, a human drone.

Brain death takes longer, in many cases.
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Post December 03, 2014, 12:20:13 AM

Re: The Comedown by Craig Steven

Marvelous detail, but no plot or characterization to speak of. Sort of like a riddle, in a way, though the idea of being dead and in hell is clear enough. But what happens next, and how--and why--did he get there in the first place?

This seems more like a writing exercise than a story. Still, it's well done.
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