The Tide Turns by Dionisio “Don” Traverso Jr.


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Post November 03, 2014, 12:20:00 PM

The Tide Turns by Dionisio “Don” Traverso Jr.

Nice story in a manner of speaking, well rounded. The intro, body and conclusion all worked together and rather professional.

I would have appreciated it more if as a westerner he focused upon a western city as opposed to Tokyo.

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Post December 04, 2014, 06:15:53 PM

Re: The Tide Turns by Dionisio “Don” Traverso Jr.

Very well done. FI know that flash isn't easy, so I appreciate it when I see one so well balanced. My biggest problem is writing graceful endings instead of just having the story hit a wall.
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