Post October 30, 2014, 08:28:12 AM

Bait House by Dionisio “Don” Traverso Jr.

Creepy on a few levels. Very modern "Twilight Zone"/ "Outer Limits" vibe. The concept of a true baddy meeting a monster resonates well. You wrote a good concept quite well. I enjoyed this.
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