Post August 09, 2014, 02:26:34 PM

Caught Out by Madeline Dyer

Excellent story. Ending was a bit abrupt for me. IF you ever re-write it you may want to lengthen it. Your style is good and the concept was interesting.
Remember: when people tell you something’s wrong or doesn’t work for them, they are almost always right. When they tell you exactly what they think is wrong and how to fix it, they are almost always wrong. – Neil Gaiman