Hullabaroo by Kim Mary Trotto


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Post August 05, 2014, 08:36:46 PM

Hullabaroo by Kim Mary Trotto

I thought this was wonderful. Anthropomorphic kangaroos are delightful! The dialogue was regional and left me with a Aussie feel. I think your ending was too easy of an answer. He got off too easy by a loophole info dump. You could have made it more complicated and more difficult in the resolution and not used an info dump to save him. Overall well worth reading.
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Post August 06, 2014, 04:07:29 PM

Re: Hullabaroo by Kim Mary Trotto

Almost never register for a website to weigh in on what i've read. i'm making an exception for Kim Mary Trotto's story. it had everything a true storyteller offers a reader: another world, created in next to no time, with dialog that puts us utterly there with both characters. it's a tribute to her talent that we know and 'get' them so well, so quickly. more, please.

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Post August 06, 2014, 04:47:50 PM

Re: Hullabaroo by Kim Mary Trotto

jcsutton wrote:Almost never register for a website to weigh in on what i've read. i'm making an exception for Kim Mary Trotto's story. it had everything a true storyteller offers a reader: another world, created in next to no time, with dialog that puts us utterly there with both characters. it's a tribute to her talent that we know and 'get' them so well, so quickly. more, please.

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Post August 29, 2014, 09:42:50 PM

Re: Hullabaroo by Kim Mary Trotto

I quite liked this one. The dialog and characterization put you right there.

I agree with Eddie that the ending was too 'telly,' but this is what happens when you're stuck with a short format. Not sure it could have been done much better within the confines of a short word limit.

The last line offers fuel for thought. What will she do, anyway?

Very nice, Kim.
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