Crack of Doom by Charles E.J. Moulton

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Post August 05, 2014, 08:16:57 PM

Crack of Doom by Charles E.J. Moulton

Good flash. I felt what he was feeling at the beginning. I connected to his loss in having to leave. The ending was a decent switch. I felt the reason he was chasing her could have been more solid or more well defined. Overall I like it!
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Post August 24, 2014, 10:29:23 PM

Re: Crack of Doom by Charles E.J. Moulton

A very short piece that packs a complete story into the narrative. Mr. Moulton gives us enough character description to place the historical figures, and his narrator keeps it interesting.
I like the ending; the hunted and the hunter seem to be stealing the same ship from each other. I couldn’t help but imagine a blue telephone box there.
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Post August 27, 2014, 09:16:44 PM

Re: Crack of Doom by Charles E.J. Moulton

Too much name-dropping for my taste, but the word limit forces little tricks like that.

I don't know if this is a plot hole or not, but shouldn't this guy have known what was coming? That's one of the reasons I don't try to write time-travel stories.

Also, his escape was WAY too easy.
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