GPS by Anthony R. Pezzula


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Post July 13, 2014, 05:26:20 PM

GPS by Anthony R. Pezzula

GPS by Anthony R. Pezzula

I found the dialogue a bit stilted to begin with but after the first few sentences it started to flow more easily. Entirely believable situation... and argument.

And what a twist! Great ending, really liked it.
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Post July 18, 2014, 08:39:11 PM

Re: GPS by Anthony R. Pezzula

Great! I wondered what was going to happen. I won't spoil it for you, but read it, you'll like it.

Very good job!
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Post July 28, 2014, 08:33:14 PM

Re: GPS by Anthony R. Pezzula

Ha. Funny. I always thought those things were up to no good!
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