Honeylips by Peter Cushnie


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Post June 13, 2014, 02:09:29 PM

Honeylips by Peter Cushnie

This is a good story. I did find it unsettling on some level though. That is not necessarily a criticism. Stories should provoke an emotional response, and that response can vary. There is a dark thread that is woven into this story that is not blatantly at its surface. Good job on a interesting story.
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Post June 20, 2014, 08:59:29 AM

Re: Honeylips by Peter Cushnie

An interesting take on the Not-So-Imaginary-Friend trope. There's definitely a creepy undertone throughout. I was slightly frustrated by the no ending but it does kind of work. Usually, the unseen horror is more terrifying in the reader's mind than an author can ever achieve by laying it out and this is what comes into play here. I liked it overall.
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Post June 29, 2014, 12:09:36 AM

Re: Honeylips by Peter Cushnie

Omigod, is that ever creepy!

He should have run for it--better, run from it. too late now, I guess . . .

This one works. Good job, Mr. Cushnie.
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