A Lucky Man by Botond Teklesz

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Post June 11, 2014, 09:09:03 AM

A Lucky Man by Botond Teklesz

It felt incomplete to me. There was too much of a jump from one time period to the future. The writing is good and your premise is good. Perhaps if you made it a longer piece you could fill in the time gap better.
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Post June 26, 2014, 04:29:34 PM

Re: A Lucky Man by Botond Teklesz

Gotta die sometime. I liked this one. There was a scifi comic book story "something" like this back in the 1970's.

This flash worked for me.

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Post July 04, 2014, 05:40:37 PM

Re: A Lucky Man by Botond Teklesz

Wait--hurricane? Where'd that come from? Mike should have hired a better pilot.

The style was sort of plodding, but I chalk that up to the writer not being a native English speaker. Keep at it, though; you'll get better. Interesting story premise.
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