Post June 23, 2014, 10:18:13 PM

Re: A Place with the Trees by Morgan K. Tanner

One of the things that stuck out most to me was Mr. Tanner's punctuation--way too many commas where there should be periods (or sometimes, question marks), and way too few commas in places they belong. This does bad things to dialog, especially.

This one also failed to work with me as horror, for the same reason an awful lot of horror does: it spends too much of its time going on about how scared the character(s) is/are. This changed at the end, but by then it was too late for me. Hint: don't scare the character--scare the reader.
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