I Wish You Well by Chris Zazzaro


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Post May 06, 2014, 02:42:23 PM

I Wish You Well by Chris Zazzaro

Very interesting. Good ending. I like how we aren't really sure what the last wish was entirely.
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Post May 27, 2014, 08:19:56 PM

Re: I Wish You Well by Chris Zazzaro

The very first paragraph sounds like one of Rod Serling's little introductory monologues, and the rest of the story fulfills that expectation. I think it would be better without that last sentence in the first paragraph.

Pretty well done, but there were a few spots where it could have used more attributions; I got confused about who was speaking.

I like how Snopes derides Edelman, but turns out to be just like him, or maybe worse.

I wouldn't mind reading more from this author.
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