The Secret by Lela Marie De La Garza


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Post April 07, 2014, 09:38:08 PM

The Secret by Lela Marie De La Garza

Good flash. It felt edged and hard very quickly. I appreciate how well the dialogue was written. The end was good as well.
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Post April 10, 2014, 10:25:25 PM

Re: The Secret by Lela Marie De La Garza

Very well done!

It turned a different way than I began to expect when Merrill told of free energy -- at that point, I immediately suspected murder. When the little girl made contact, I thought the dead professor would name his killer.

Oops. Not that story, and I was pleasantly surprised by the difference.
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