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April 07, 2014, 09:33:40 PM
Beware of Hitchhikers by Jeremy Simons
This is a good horror piece. It made me feel like the ending was unfair, not that that is a bad thing. It differentiates it from cookie cutter horror where the terror or curse has to make sense. The horror was linear but not quite fair play. The way it was written did make me feel a little frantic right along with your protagonist. I assume that was intentional, the rushed jumpy panicked feel. Good job.
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