Alien G. Robinson by Patrick Hemstreet


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Post March 11, 2014, 09:34:30 AM

Alien G. Robinson by Patrick Hemstreet

I read this and liked it. I re-read it and liked it more. I liked the second half more than the first half. I am not sure if the bad guy alien trying usurp the other bad guy aliens was the right choice. Couldn't that rogue actually have been trying to stop his peers and have been pro-human? That would have been a good twist after that long kidnapping sequence.
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Post March 17, 2014, 12:23:25 AM

Re: Alien G. Robinson by Patrick Hemstreet

A good deal of this was really funny, but I thought it went on for too long.

Really off-center stuff, very unusual, and that's what I liked best about it. Cammy kicks ass.
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Post March 19, 2014, 02:28:30 PM

Re: Alien G. Robinson by Patrick Hemstreet

Interesting story, and I’m sure Edward G. Robinson would have a comment or two about Cammy. Something like “Okay, Kid, you showed me your stuff-- now I show you mine, Bang, Bang, Bang.” Edward G. Robinson is one of my favorite actors, and his last role was in the movie Soylent Green staring Charlton Heston.

Space aliens studying our culture might interpret us from our communication systems: Television Broadcasting would be a complete process in hearing, viewing, and observing our culture especially from movies, old and new. And if that is the case, we will never be invaded if the aliens watched the Rambo movies!

Nice intro, interesting enough to capture one’s attention, and the first paragraph also started to mold Cammy to us by show and not tell. Good. And the following dialogue also holds our attention while showing more about Cammy and getting us in her head a little. Further development turns our interest into curiosity. And the story follows an intricate web of action and deception.

I loved how President Obama’s speech was captured! Nice.

Good job!
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Post March 19, 2014, 04:21:10 PM

Re: Alien G. Robinson by Patrick Hemstreet

Megawatts wrote:Interesting story, and I’m sure Edward G. Robinson would have a comment or two about Cammy. Something like “Okay, Kid, you showed me your stuff-- now I show you mine, Bang, Bang, Bang.” Edward G. Robinson is one of my favorite actors, and his last role was in the movie Soylent Green staring Charlton Heston.

He also played opposite Charlton Heston in "The Ten Commandments". After Moses parted the Red Sea, I think his exact words were, "Okay Deliverer, you showed me your stuff-- now I show you mine, Bang, Bang, Bang.

He was so versatile!

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Post March 20, 2014, 06:28:49 AM

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Mark, I always get a bang outa ya!!!
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