I'd Rather Be by Clinton Van Inman


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Post December 16, 2013, 06:54:09 PM

I'd Rather Be by Clinton Van Inman

A very nice love poem.

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Post January 05, 2014, 12:45:45 AM

Re: I'd Rather Be by Clinton Van Inman

Hmm. While it's a nice sentiment at the end, to borrow a theme from chess puzzle contests, "remove the last couple of lines and you're on your way to a completely different poem". So much so, that I was a bit disappointed with the ending!

Then there's a bit of lack of clarity whether he "wants to be something great and epic" or wants to be "humble and unpretentious". So again you could get two poems out of which order the pairs went, and done right, you get a "discussion" with two equally valid points.

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