Below the Purple Waves by Jonathan A. Stefanovic


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Post July 25, 2013, 12:42:36 PM

Below the Purple Waves by Jonathan A. Stefanovic

There are so many ways to look at this. At first I looked to see if there was a connection between the number 12, not one that I could discern unless you were in jail for 12 years. I followed that line of reasoning, not satisfied.

then religion and mass media as the syrup and associated villains, okay, but still not satisfied.


Then I said to myself, "self, it's just a poem." THAT did not work at all.

So I'm still working on it attempting different verbalized word speed, and some different punctuation.

let's put it this way, you have my attention.

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Post July 25, 2013, 10:56:01 PM

Re: Below the Purple Waves by Jonathan A. Stefanovic

I wonder if it's just a straight forward fantasy. There's nothing wrong with the occasional escapist trip, especially one that takes us into the realms of the surreal. Maybe there's no real subtext here other than the experience of a dream. It does seem to be about a journey into darkness, decay, perhaps decadence, perhaps addiction. A journey from which the narrator doesn't appear to escape. To quote the Eagles, "You can check out any time you like, but you can never leave..."

I like the structure and rhyming of the poem. It's reminds me of...

In Xanadu did Kubla Khan
A stately pleasure-dome decree:
Where Alph, the sacred river, ran
Through caverns measureless to man
Down to a sunless sea.

from Kubla Khan by Samuel Taylor Coleridge


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Post July 26, 2013, 07:40:56 AM

Re: Below the Purple Waves by Jonathan A. Stefanovic

John wrote:
I wonder if it's just a straight forward fantasy. There's nothing wrong with the occasional escapist trip, especially one that takes us into the realms of the surreal. Maybe there's no real subtext here other than the experience of a dream. It does seem to be about a journey into darkness, decay, perhaps decadence, perhaps addiction. A journey from which the narrator doesn't appear to escape. To quote the Eagles, "You can check out any time you like, but you can never leave..."

I like the structure and rhyming of the poem. It's reminds me of...

In Xanadu did Kubla Khan
A stately pleasure-dome decree:
Where Alph, the sacred river, ran
Through caverns measureless to man
Down to a sunless sea.

from Kubla Khan by Samuel Taylor Coleridge


Okay.

your comment and the title of Jonathan's poem kicked in

Yellow Submarine, by Ringo Star.

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