Practical Joke by Robin B. Lipinski Poem


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Post June 21, 2013, 03:19:06 AM

Practical Joke by Robin B. Lipinski Poem

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Post June 21, 2013, 10:53:52 PM

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Chartles of semmor;
First and last
1. Thanks Mark, for the wonderful treat, your wife not only bakes well, but the package survived the Post Office.
2. A shameless plug now for the website I'm working on, wishfulenigma.com
3. 'Practical Joke' is my last submitted poem here at Aphelion, however, the jokes on me and has been so for centuries now.
4. I believe in paying my way, so in return for shamelessly plugging my new experiment, I must pay in poetry. The following is a
sample of what I will be writing on 'my' delusion.

Science Fiction Writers of Delusion

Einstein wore the hair, dared to release the explosion of genius
flaked obsidian chips falling as the radiation fell Hiroshima
level playing field of horror the soul of man embraces.

Drones of choice by the chosen one
generals by his side
smiling while the computer spies
I watched in Germany as his lips melted, only now in the thousands instead of Europe's millions.

Heinlen, Asimov, Herbert, Bradbury...
Insane or genius?

A candle, burning flame led by those chosen
implanted with the knowledge taken
to do and show the genus
while in dreams the story continues.

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Post July 01, 2013, 11:29:54 AM

Quality of Poetry

Robin's poetry comes off best when it is more philosophical than story telling. Nevertheless, poetic greats of old would kill to write at the level of even the worst of Robin's poetry.

This story of a ship to the stars had a point it was making that humor/creative appeal is relative. Translated - if you can get a relative to appreciate your work - you're at the top of your game.

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Post July 01, 2013, 07:03:39 PM

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Lipinski wrote:...
2. A shameless plug now for the website I'm working on, wishfulenigma.com
3. 'Practical Joke' is my last submitted poem here at Aphelion, however, the jokes on me and has been so for centuries now.


Hi Robin.

I hope this is not your last poem here!

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Post July 11, 2013, 07:18:46 PM

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humor comes from concern, love and hurt. Listen closely to the best, listen to the underlying words.

Try Richard Pryor, George Carlin and Lenny Bruce. Listen closly and with care. parse the words, sentences and all that.

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Post July 22, 2013, 06:55:17 AM

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Hilarious opening line. I liked the whole piece, but that first line really fired it off gorgeously.

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