Robot Rust by Robin B. Lipinski (poem)


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Post March 20, 2013, 06:31:13 PM

Robot Rust by Robin B. Lipinski (poem)

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Post April 06, 2013, 03:17:39 AM

Re: Robot Rust by Robin B. Lipinski (poem)

Robin has many styles of writing, one of which is the ability to write story poems, that paint the scenery and the obligatory truths of life.

He masters imagery, something I have personally improved on from reading his poetry and swapping challenges with him.

Shakespeare would be impressed and a little intimidated.

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Post April 06, 2013, 02:28:19 PM

Re: Robot Rust by Robin B. Lipinski (poem)

i love how Lester opens Pandora's box
and give thanks to both Mark, Lester, and all the others here who support this world for writers...
and of course Mark, you inspired another poem.
***

Meeting William

pleasant fellow really
this Shakespeare character
met him the other day having tea
sitting near the steps of the Cathedral

there next to him was Poe
now there is a fellow a writer should get to know
and the two were engaged in wits

Edgar spoke of crows
William spake of love
and i just listened to the words coming from their breath

i would have listened longer
gaining inspiration
maybe learn more of word creation
but both William and Edgar have long been dead
supping upon wormwood and muddied water
the smell
the smell
oh horror begotten from the moment
I left.

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Post April 06, 2013, 11:26:12 PM

Re: Robot Rust by Robin B. Lipinski (poem)

Lipinski wrote:i love how Lester opens Pandora's box
and give thanks to both Mark, Lester, and all the others here who support this world for writers...
and of course Mark, you inspired another poem.
***

Meeting William

pleasant fellow really
this Shakespeare character
met him the other day having tea
sitting near the steps of the Cathedral

there next to him was Poe
now there is a fellow a writer should get to know
and the two were engaged in wits

Edgar spoke of crows
William spake of love
and i just listened to the words coming from their breath

i would have listened longer
gaining inspiration
maybe learn more of word creation
but both William and Edgar have long been dead
supping upon wormwood and muddied water
the smell
the smell
oh horror begotten from the moment
I left.

This is an even better poem than the one you have in this issue. This is really special. I wish I was set up to put it to music.

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Post April 06, 2013, 11:26:47 PM

Inspiration Births New Inspiration

Words of Truth
By Mark Edgemon


Words, drift on the wind, swirling, twirling on the tongue,
Lilting on the ears of some, lacerating the souls of others.
Those that can hear are blessed; the spiritually deaf self-deprecate.
What moves some to tears moves others to wrath.
Let pride be not the interpreter; for he deceives;
He connives; he misinterprets innocence to evil.
What the prideful hear, are echoes of days when they had worth.
Those days long since forgotten, maintained by memories relived,
As future days are lived anew, screening the calls for their arrogant mind.

No one gets through - no one gets out - alive...for damn sure!

The End

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Post April 07, 2013, 06:52:14 PM

Re: Robot Rust by Robin B. Lipinski (poem)

thanks Mark.
i like too, what you wrote
now let us see what the robot wrote...
***

you have heard of, of, of, (click) me
during the war of, of, of (click) suppression
the day they tried to take technology away.

(reboot)
(insert disk)
(power adjustment for fluctuations)
me, me, me...you have heard of, of, of...

"Malfunction: error code 1031, notify administrator"

"BANG!"

Now, the moment of timeless bliss
tides ebb while in grasp
robotic fingers tingle...

"Status green, TTK-109, check out with the administrator...Next!"

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Post April 07, 2013, 11:59:49 PM

Re: Robot Rust by Robin B. Lipinski (poem)

Auger-Headed Gut Wrencher
By Mark Edgemon


Artificial intelligent, emotions far reaching and not artifical.
Atomic by design, he could not control his rate of fission,
Thinking of her, his nuclear rod pulsating, waiting for discharge
By the female scientist, who constructed his frame.
He, warm to hers, spewed lubricant through a leaking hose.

"I need" the lonely robot sputtered, while she loosened his bolts.
"I want" he stuttered, while she lightly finger traced his wires.
"I'm oscillating, palpitating, pulsating, heart pumper throbbing;
I shudder, tremble, quiver, shiver"; He screamed, "You know what I need, baby!"
She quieted him down by tightening his nuts.

Happy, smiley robot.

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Post April 08, 2013, 12:28:15 AM

Re: Robot Rust by Robin B. Lipinski (poem)

Mark, from one robot to another, "Excellent!"
or
"Bravo!"
this one should be submitted to Iian.

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Post April 13, 2013, 06:20:25 PM

Re: Robot Rust by Robin B. Lipinski (poem)

About Robin's original poem: I love the narrative of the poem as well. And there's some very good alliteration throughout. I also like the line "mothers wrinkles smiled" a lot. Excellent as always Mr. Lipinski.

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Post April 14, 2013, 10:10:03 PM

Re: Robot Rust by Robin B. Lipinski (poem)

thanks John, of course I now have to pay my dues and respect to you and by your inspiration...

Mr. Mrs. Ms.

by: what is proper is only proper when well timed

In days of old they said, "Your Highness," genuflecting on their knees
of course they also said, and still say, "You bastard!"
that is a term that still applies to me.

People call people by name and title
they have done so since man gained the gift of language and speech
but what will they call a robot?

Serial number?
Model?
or will people give them 'cutesy' names.

"Come here tin lips, show momma you love me."

"Hey butter nuts, you're acting a little rusted, get to the fridge and bring me my protein bar."

If history is any indication of what's in store
technology will change
people will evolve
and names will still sound, well, sorry,
but they will still sound corny.

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