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Tell us what you thought about the February 2013 issue.
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Lester Curtis wrote:This story had a great deal of especially nice descriptive prose in it, but overall it was just dreary. It failed to evoke any strong feeling in me. The story gave the impression that Martin was the main character, but he really didn't play much of a part in it at all -- no conflict, no resolution, no denouement. His internal state is consistently one of simple bafflement, nothing else. For my money, the story didn't even have a climax.
After the third repetition, I started skimming past the material that was being used over and over and over again. This technique would work for a movie, but it doesn't work at all well in print.
I wish I could think of a better way to accomplish the same effect . . . maybe reducing the amount of material that gets repeated? I don't know, but the repetition is just too much.
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