Alien Dandruff by Robin B. Lipinski


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Post February 18, 2013, 01:53:14 AM

Alien Dandruff by Robin B. Lipinski

Wow!

I seldom comment on the poetry, but this one's terrific!
I was raised by humans. What's your excuse?

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Post February 18, 2013, 08:32:06 PM

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thanks for the kind words Lester, of course now I have to write another poem and using your 'thanks' as inspiration
I'll write this one for you.
***

Desire to Be
By: I just know it.

Sigourney Weaver, have you seen her?
Words of 'fine' come to mind
with her curves and sharp smile
and to think
she has been up into space
even cloned a couple of times;
fighting monsters, battling corporate greed
and yet?
she never seems to age...

I know her secret even though she won't tell
the reason for her endless beauty
and one of the reasons I wrote this months Aphelions poem;
it's in her hair
hidden
waiting for my brush,
for if I ever meet her
I'd comb the depths of her locks
and make a little tea from the released strands,
and then I'll live forever!
(you see, I know Sigourney is truly an alien, and like her, that is what I want to be.)

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Post February 20, 2013, 03:21:59 PM

Re: Alien Dandruff by Robin B. Lipinski

The best way to read one of Robin's poems is to let it wash over you without seeking to understand it and save the comprehension for the next 15 times you "comb" through it.

Also, I find that allowing your spirit/heart to grasp the overall theme or message of a poem without laboring for it, gives the reader a premise to study the imagery of a poem for clues to the author's mindset or beliefs.

What I got from this is beware of those with a quick easy smile, willing to glad hand you cause - they likely have something up their sleeves.

Brilliant work, Robin and thank you for it.
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Post February 21, 2013, 09:57:39 AM

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Really pretty funny when you get to the bottom of it all.

War of the Worlds, in reverse.
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Post February 21, 2013, 12:38:05 PM

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That's THE definition of a "bad hair day."
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Post February 21, 2013, 12:44:26 PM

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Lester wrote:
That's THE definition of a "bad hair day."


I would suggest as opposed to bad hair, a Head & Shoulders day?

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Post February 21, 2013, 11:54:39 PM

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thanks for reading and commenting.
***

(a short poem)

A Bad Hair Day

long golden curls
gel of nair
bald faced lie to a jilted lover
'Vidal Sassoon' opaque in bottle
awash in revenge.

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Post February 22, 2013, 01:04:11 AM

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Safe, normal people,
fall from the head of God like lice;
so numerous,
they find more room on the floor;
to be stepped upon
by those keeping rhythmically in step with society.

...The Accelerated Pace - by Mark Edgemon

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Post February 27, 2013, 12:49:50 PM

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Mark Edgemon wrote:The best way to read one of Robin's poems is to let it wash over you without seeking to understand it and save the comprehension for the next 15 times you "comb" through it.


That approach sounds somewhat similar to listening to radio static until you hear voices.

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Post February 27, 2013, 03:58:55 PM

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vates wrote:
Mark Edgemon wrote:The best way to read one of Robin's poems is to let it wash over you without seeking to understand it and save the comprehension for the next 15 times you "comb" through it.


That approach sounds somewhat similar to listening to radio static until you hear voices.

Some people hear static, while others hear only symphonies.
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Post February 27, 2013, 04:11:48 PM

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Static
By False Perception


His damn radio won't play his favorite songs,
The scenery moves by too quickly when he's late.
His significant other wants to be a person too,
Instead of living a life of happy servitude.

His food doesn't taste quiet right;
Cable brings obsession of channel changing;
The house is too quite and the neighbors are too loud;
He lost his sense of gratitude.

The appreciation of being still is gone;
He's in a hurry to go nowhere fast;
But when he finally gets where he's going,
That's when things will be al-right...damn it!

The End

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Post February 28, 2013, 11:45:46 AM

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Mark, you're definitely getting into the groove of the record of writing, hopefully one day it will spin gold
or platinum but speaking from personal experience, my records always get pirated in China and then become
obsolete as DVD and digital take over, sigh...

Vates, you're correct about the static and it is a two way street. Thanks to the two of you for some further inspiration.

White Noise
By: A human

Moving from hair covering the ears and eyes
the flow, tempo, pulse,
coursing called life
I just can't see it.

I'm a hippie you see, "Peace"
into free love and pot
pink VW bus, beads, banging drums,
fighting against the man...

I'm an executive you see, "Profit"
into stocks and bonds
black Lexus, diamonds, beating first quarter estimates,
fighting against the man...

I'm a religious you see, "God"
into Sundays, organ music, the Bible,
yellow church bus, donations, a good sermon,
fighting against the man...

I'm a warrior you see, "War"
into winning and victory
gray steel tank, bullets, bombs,
fighting against the man...

I'm poor you see, "Hungry"
into trying to stay alive,
soggy cardboard box, stealing, food,
fighting against the man...

I am man
into everything
driver of a world
living a life
the life of me
heard across time and galaxy
and yet?
I cannot hear anything.

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