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The Hand By Omar Zahzah

PostPosted: December 20, 2012, 08:19:12 PM
by TaoPhoenix
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Re: The Hand By Omar Zahzah

PostPosted: December 21, 2012, 06:50:03 AM
by Robert_Moriyama
TaoPhoenix wrote:.


= "What is the sound of one hand clapping?" :roll:

Re: The Hand By Omar Zahzah

PostPosted: December 21, 2012, 11:16:54 AM
by TaoPhoenix
Robert_Moriyama wrote:
TaoPhoenix wrote:.


= "What is the sound of one hand clapping?" :roll:


And dear readers, Robert being the sneaky fellow he is, chose *this* story to append that comment to. Thus I do believe it qualifies as a story comment.

It's another tale in First Person, for totally different reasons than "Modification Program".
This is a lonely hand, all alone grafted onto an arm, with no other sentient hand to Have and to Hold, in Health through Sickness, until Scalpel do they part. Not even to clap.

Re: The Hand By Omar Zahzah

PostPosted: December 21, 2012, 03:54:25 PM
by regrehan
Well ... it certainly qualifies as dark and disturbing. I expected it to go someplace, but it never went ... it just ended. I wish the author had done more with it, because the unusual perspective was good.

Re: The Hand By Omar Zahzah

PostPosted: December 21, 2012, 05:23:12 PM
by Robert_Moriyama
regrehan wrote:Well ... it certainly qualifies as dark and disturbing. I expected it to go someplace, but it never went ... it just ended. I wish the author had done more with it, because the unusual perspective was good.


In my correspondence with the author, I noted the twist -- the "evil hand" plot thwarted by the ego and vanity of the transplant recipient. Haunted hand 0, Me Generation 1.

Re: The Hand By Omar Zahzah

PostPosted: January 08, 2013, 01:37:22 AM
by Lester Curtis
I think it might have been better without all the many repetitions of "If I were conscious . . . " They only serve to remind that the narrator isn't conscious, and therefor shouldn't be narrating anything.

The ending was unsatisfying, too; the 'host' defeated the evil transplant by simply neglecting it to death. Where's the struggle in that?