Loving Monica by Phil Davis


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Post August 15, 2012, 02:05:12 PM

Loving Monica by Phil Davis

Loving Monica By Phil Davis

I really enjoyed this story. The way the protagonist describes Monica, you feel his sense of contamination and disgust, and the horror that, despite this, he is still drawn to her. I was cringing through the French kisses. Brilliant!

The ending was very good, very neat. Everything clicked into place perfectly.

Bravo!

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Post August 15, 2012, 02:14:11 PM

Re: Loving Monica by Phil Davis

Verse wrote:Loving Monica By Phil Davis

I really enjoyed this story. The way the protagonist describes Monica, you feel his sense of contamination and disgust, and the horror that, despite this, he is still drawn to her. I was cringing through the French kisses. Brilliant!

The ending was very good, very neat. Everything clicked into place perfectly.

Bravo!

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I'm not sure he WAS still drawn to her. He seemed puzzled by the fact that all the other men of their acquaintance still found her so attractive...

Anyway, there won't be anything to "click into place" once Monica has the protagonist -- er -- repaired. :shock:
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Post August 15, 2012, 04:51:17 PM

Re: Loving Monica by Phil Davis

Phil Davies, you are one sick bastard. :lol: Thanks for the entertainment; it was excellently rendered.

Reading this story was like driving past an accident scene . . . you don't want to see revolting gore, but you can't stop looking, either.

Too bad for the poor protagonist in this story; he almost got away . . .
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Post August 16, 2012, 04:21:39 PM

Re: Loving Monica by Phil Davis

Fun story. And with a happy ending! No more cat boxes to clean!
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Post August 16, 2012, 04:55:16 PM

Re: Loving Monica by Phil Davis

McCamy_Taylor wrote:Fun story. And with a happy ending! No more cat boxes to clean!

Yeah, and he won't have to have sex with her again, either!
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