Kristallnacht by J. B. Hogan


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Post October 11, 2007, 08:07:25 PM

Kristallnacht by J. B. Hogan

A touch of Slaughter House Five in this well crafted story. As I read on, I became more interested in the events taking place, and tried to understand the symbolism, and purpose of the two soldiers moving back in time. Are American soldiers now the new Nazis? In some ways the author suggests that, but Karl didn’t act the part of a Nazi soldier when transported back in time.
Vic seemed to be transformed into a more aggressive character, but Karl remained as himself.

Many of the stores along the street had windows broken, except the grocery store in which Vic entered. And that grocery store had the Star of David painted on its front window! Strange that the mob hadn’t attacked that grocery store especially with a clear indication that it was owned by a Jewish family. Maybe the mob didn’t get to it yet?  Or maybe Karl and Vic were not in Nazi Germany!! Possible! 

Somehow, the grocery store in the past save Karl and Vic from the house in the present. Vic entered the house in the past, searched it and found nothing. Karl didn’t want to enter the house in the past just as he didn’t want to enter the house in the present. As I said before, I don’t understand the relationship between how the past saved them in the present.

I thought the writing very good, sentence length, balance, and the dialogue also very good.

A good one!
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Post October 15, 2007, 05:29:08 PM

Re: Kristallnacht by J. B. Hogan

Your writing has great potential. Please, however, look forward instead of back unto ths tragedies that humanity has overcome. I read them, and this, your story, in my opinion, is the best of the month. Congrats and submit and don't ever give up. Just turn around, it's easy -- the same, just a different face.
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Post October 17, 2007, 04:54:27 AM

Kristallnacht by J. B. Hogan

ah, it's the time tunnel all over again! well written but the politics are pretty obvious, which is also fine in most ways, i guess. love those weasel words!

as my good friend megawatts noted, the (possibly) jewish family was in a building that was untouched, interesting. maybe vic and karl went back to a bizarre, alternate version of 1938 germany, or maybe Mr. Hogan is telling us something about his thoughts on the US and its involvement in the middle east, i.e he maybe believes there's a bit of a role reversal here? probably is.

this was well written and the soldiering and historical aspects of it were convincing to me, but to tell you that i'm completely at ease or clear on the politics suggested here would be a lie. then again, that's what telling stories is also about, eliciting a response.
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Post October 18, 2007, 08:32:52 PM

Re: Kristallnacht by J. B. Hogan

I have to admit that it was more The Time Tunnel than Slaughterhouse Five,  but that's not necessarily a bad thing.

The story was well written and constructed, no matter what similarities the readers might imagine.  

My own imagining consisted of some kind of link between the protag and the German/Jewish family during the the Nazi era, but this was never made clear.

I'm not sure what the moral of this whole thing was.  .  .it seemed to be a mix between:   Sometimes EOTS (Enemies of the State) are innocent citizens.  .  .and sometimes not.

Couldn't really figure it out.  And I tried.

Good stuff, but it could have been a little clearer.

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Post September 23, 2014, 05:21:55 PM

Re: Kristallnacht by J. B. Hogan

robert_eggleton wrote:Your writing has great potential. Please, however, look forward instead of back unto ths tragedies that humanity has overcome. I read them, and this, your story, in my opinion, is the best of the month. Congrats and submit and don't ever give up. Just turn around, it's easy -- the same, just a different face.


Thanks, I didn't give up. I'll tell you about it as soon as I find the correct place to post an update.
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